Hello people. I'm a 17-year-old kid who decided to pursue poetry. I plan to publish a collection of poems with personal creativity, and I decided to publish one of my works, I ask for comments, I accept criticism only from people with literary knowledge, not for anything else because I can learn from them, but still what you think, I know that you need to edit some things, thanks to all in advance. Be healthy. Be good! What kind of person are you, among many others? Some are more evil, others more worthy. Do you help your neighbor when he is in trouble? Or are you pushing him down into the abyss? Think about tomorrow, what are you going to do! But be careful, because you will surely forget it? But up there in the heavens, SOMEONE is watching us and seeing our deeds, whether they are good or bad. Man is a spiritual being in whom, FAITH, HOPE AND LOVE, must be present in the heart! There is no place for malice and hatred, isn't love the greatest? When you see a friend in trouble, give him your hand without thinking! Help him stand up and move on! Be with him in his difficult days! After all, friends are there to shake hands. Ask for forgiveness and it will be given to you, of course, if your heart is sincere. And remember that man is a spiritual being in whom FAITH, HAPPINESS AND LOVE must be present in the heart.
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Really great :) I'm not on "you" with poetry, but I think you're getting up!